tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1845244417955383898.post87623551881262950..comments2023-12-06T03:30:14.016-05:00Comments on Desperately Searching for my Inner Mary Poppins: Showing vs. TellingAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05283503033516504436noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1845244417955383898.post-9493612143286177532009-03-16T20:25:00.000-04:002009-03-16T20:25:00.000-04:00At what point am I OVER Doing the "showing" aspect...At what point am I OVER Doing the "showing" aspect though? Do I really want to go over every single page and add an extra paragraph for each sentence where I told you that she was beautiful? Granted I'm having quite a bit of fun, but I'm not sure I was prepared to double the word count in my novel ;)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05283503033516504436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1845244417955383898.post-56916749881588356622009-03-13T22:24:00.000-04:002009-03-13T22:24:00.000-04:00Oh, and I also agree about the comment on the big ...Oh, and I also agree about the comment on the big nose versus the nose that's the size of a Coke can. For one thing, it eliminates vagueness, but it's also just more interesting to use imagery like that. Here's from a book I was reading today: "Her open eye was like nearly black balsamic vinegar beading on white china." Waaaay more interesting to me than just saying she had one darkly colored eye wide open!Jenny Pennyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04825876444617545025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1845244417955383898.post-39844587290428268772009-03-13T22:21:00.000-04:002009-03-13T22:21:00.000-04:00No, it's not that appearances don't necessarily ma...No, it's not that appearances don't necessarily matter. It's nice to have physical descriptions -- of settings, of people -- all that. It adds texture. But as with real life, what people are saying is rarely the meat of what's being said. And in writing, you can really have fun with this aspect of the way people communicate. Just think: If someone TELLS you that he's not a racist, that he even has a black friend, that he even let the black janitor at his child's school use his cell phone once, what he's really SHOWING you is the kind of person he is. And if you were writing about this person, you wouldn't say, "Frank was a racist without knowing it." You would tell the story about Frank and how he brags about his one black friend the time he let the black janitor use his cell phone. <BR/><BR/>I tell you, it can be really fun to rewrite a telling passage into a showing one. Just take one tiny aspect of something you've written and try it. I think you'll enjoy it, because it really brings a story to life!Jenny Pennyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04825876444617545025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1845244417955383898.post-62621623389215419272009-03-13T16:02:00.000-04:002009-03-13T16:02:00.000-04:00Very close. Maybe right in the context of a novel...Very close. Maybe right in the context of a novel. Two scenerios would be perfect. Nice blog!Tanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10518718614911804428noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1845244417955383898.post-58969849046811359792009-03-13T16:01:00.000-04:002009-03-13T16:01:00.000-04:00Ah yes, so many people are much more apt to tell t...Ah yes, so many people are much more apt to tell than show with their words. You did a good job. I'd say we all need to be more creative with how we measure things though. Big/large, that's relative to the person's own interpretation. You and Tommy may have a different take on what would be a BIG nose. Tommy was able to see before, so you can reference something he would be able to recall from memory or give him a visual based on something he may be able to touch. So maybe sweet Marybeth's donkey doesn't have a BIG nose, but a nose the size of a Coke can.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1845244417955383898.post-20002012124899307242009-03-13T15:45:00.000-04:002009-03-13T15:45:00.000-04:00So in other words I'm leaving the object/person/si...So in other words I'm leaving the object/person/situation up for interpretation? Are you saying that physical appearances do not necessarily matter?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05283503033516504436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1845244417955383898.post-5600289529237342342009-03-13T14:43:00.000-04:002009-03-13T14:43:00.000-04:00P.P.S. By telling us that Tommy was recently blind...P.P.S. By telling us that Tommy was recently blinded by his brother with a Magnext Roller Coaster, you are SHOWING us something about Tommy's brother. Could he be diabolical? a klutz? angry at Tommy about something?<BR/><BR/>:)Jenny Pennyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04825876444617545025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1845244417955383898.post-46568415193554525252009-03-13T14:41:00.000-04:002009-03-13T14:41:00.000-04:00Hmn. I think you're getting there. In your showing...Hmn. I think you're getting there. <BR/><BR/>In your showing example, the physical descriptions of donkey are extraneous to what's really being revealed to the reader (and Tommy is just a blind tool along for the ride, which is fine): I mean, what's being revealed to the reader, what you're SHOWING the reader, is that this little girl (1) loves/misses her grandma and (2) is imaginative. In other words, the TELLING version of this passage would actually read more like this: "Marybeth was a very imaginative child. She didn't get to see her grandma very often, so every night she slept with a pet donkey her Grandma had given her."<BR/><BR/>P.S. Instead of telling me, "I'm funny!" you are showing me that you're funny, with your husband/jackass remark.Jenny Pennyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04825876444617545025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1845244417955383898.post-79986216091141297202009-03-13T13:53:00.000-04:002009-03-13T13:53:00.000-04:00what was the question? j/k you did a good jobwhat was the question? j/k you did a good jobAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09805530829452999508noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1845244417955383898.post-207896684291928112009-03-13T13:29:00.000-04:002009-03-13T13:29:00.000-04:00Nice...well I suppose I should have considered tha...Nice...well I suppose I should have considered that. Let's pretend he just had is eyes poked out by his older brother with his Magnext Roller Coaster! Now could you answer the question?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05283503033516504436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1845244417955383898.post-5592529787586539272009-03-13T13:25:00.000-04:002009-03-13T13:25:00.000-04:00It's hard to say...cuz if Tommy has always been bl...It's hard to say...cuz if Tommy has always been blind then he has no concept of colors...he does know textures though.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09805530829452999508noreply@blogger.com